In line with the previous post, I asked my ENGL 1290 (Business and Professional Writing) class to help me construct an essay, given the following thesis statement and topic sentences. The context of this essay is a recent administrative decision to create a facility to house a school of law where they had previously planned a space for the library on campus to use as a computer training room. Comments from students in this post will be used to change the following sentences, building an essay where there was just an outline of sentences.
Thesis: We need to have more, not less, resources devoted to the library at Thompson Rivers University.
Library services appeal widely to every area of academic life.
Proper technology for proper numbers of students is vital, if librarians are to serve the university with excellence.
Librarians provide more than just information. Their goal is increased accessibility and assessability of information in the university community.
Concluding Thesis: The library at TRU should be expanded in accordance with the explosion of information available in our world.